3rd draft of our documentary

This is the third draft of our documentary.

Feedback-

• The indent was too long and it did not get straight to the point of what the documentary is going to be about
• The typing part still needs more shots, or to be changed overall.
• But overall good improvements from the 1st and 2nd draft.

Re-filming the Presenter's part

• Today the whole group got together and refilmed the presenter part (my part.) We filmed the whole entire script in the school Library, we did this as what Tobore noticed while editing was that the my voice sounded different to the voiceover as you could tell that I was in a different location. So to prevent this what we did was we filmed me saying the whole script in one location and then extracted the audio clips and placed them where needed.

• We also took into consideration our feedback from our first draft- so we used different shots, as opposed to having a mid-shot all the way through the introduction.

2nd draft of our documentary

This is our second draft of our documentary.

Feedback

WWW-

• The concept of the documentary is good.
• The message the presenter was giving was also very effective as it comes across as educational
• Statistics was used in the right way

EBI-

• More shots could be used
• There could be more interviews

Evaluation, And Production

In today's media lesson Victoria and Myself worked on the Evaluation. We did a little filming on our target audience.

From doing this what we have left to include in our 1st draft of our evaluation is

1. Saying how and where we attracted our target audience.
2. How and why is our chosen channel of distribution relates to our potential target audience.
3. How we chose our channel of distribution.

Tobore: Is also working on the stop- start animation for our documentary while Mariana is also focusing on our production side. This way each member in the group can work in turn on the work that needs to be done.

Our Script for our new idea

This is the first draft of our script for our new idea. The problem with this script is that the alignment is incorrect which makes it difficult to tell if something is supposed to be a voiceover or not.

The red line shows where my teacher said that the alignment was wrong. This needs to be done with the correct alignment.

Public Interviews

• On saturday the 6/2/11 Victoria and I set out to film in Westfeilds, and conduct our public interviews.

• As we filmed quite late during the evening what we did instead was we found a pilar that had a light above it and we filmed in the spot. I choose to film in this spot as I felt that it was a better composition than what we had in our first draft. What we improved: This time we kept a constant shot each time we filmed a participant.

• Addressing our Target Audience: When we set out to film our public Interviews I did was I seleceted people from the crowd that I thought fitted with our target audience which is 16+

Research&planning, Filiming and Editing.

Today- we filmed the presenters part of the documentary, which is essentially the beginning. We shot the scene where I am in the Librabry talking about the history of language how it evolved and words that we use now.

Editing: Alongside everything else we then uploaded what we have filmed so far including things for our evaluation.

31/1/11- On this day Tobore and I sat and filmed the ethographic part of our documentary, where I had to type up stats and statistics.

These are my 1st Drafts of my color coded research and planning system that my teacher made to help us plan our documentary.

What the colors mean:

Red- Introduction to the whole series

Green- Introduction to episode

Blue- Subtopic

Yellow- A Break

Orange- Summary of episode

Pink- Recap of previous topic

The feedback I got from this planning: The feedback I got was that in my first plan it was very disorganized as there were arrows everywhere and it was not clear as to what each section was including.

This is my second draft of our Idea for research and planning.

In my second draft to make things clearer what I did was I added a Key. This was to make it easier to differentiate between what each section was going to entail.

For the other episode plans this is the structure I intend to continue with, as the feedback I got from this was that it was much better and easier to read and understand.