Our 1st Draft

The first draft of our documentary is due on the 17th of December.

Yesterday we started to edit our work in the lesson and we got feedback from Ms on what needs to be changes and re filmed.

Feedback
After we had shown our teacher the clips that we had this was the feedback that we got:

• Adding case Studies

• Re film the introductory section as, it needs to be less "Staged"

• Start on Music

• Composition when filming interview and public interview

• Lighting- as in the beginning we filmed the mouths in different places

• Questions that are asked need to be consistent and not varied or changed

• Visual effect- we were advised to think about something that would interest the audience, this can be done by using still images.

• Extreme close ups- try to avoid this

• Incorporate match on action into intro to make it more interesting.

Changes we need to make-

• The script- On the first section, we have decided to change one of our slang words.
  
• My part (Introduction to the documentary) We need to film in a different Location.

What needs to be re filmed-

• Mr. Foley's part- as the composition needs to be improved
  
• Mouths in the introduction
  
• Our public interviews- as there were too many different shots and some people we moving around too much making it hard for us to film.
• My part- as we filmed it inside- we could use a different location

What we learnt from this.!
As a group what we decided to do was w to make a video of us saying what we have learnt from the feedback that we got from Ms. This is to help us in our evaluation, as we have acknowledged what needs to be changed improved and re filmed in order to make our documentary successful.